Hello!
Your thesis is very thorough and gives your reader a clear idea of your topic. However, you can improve the punctuation so that it becomes two complete sentences rather than one run-on.
"Since the early 2000s, technology has made major improvements by creating more social media sites, virtual reality headsets, and updating mobile phones. However, people are relying more on technology for communication rather than face-to-face interaction."
This would be an appropriate way of writing your thesis without changing any of the wording. Otherwise, your thesis looks great!
I hope this helps you! Have a fantastic day!
