My mom gave me a Kool Action game for my birthday on October 27, 2010, and I was SO excited. When I opened it, I could see that parts were missing, so we went back to the store and tried to return it. They said tough luck and wouldn't even talk to us. Now, I'm writing to you to try and get my money back so I can get something else for my birthday that actually works. Mom said it cost $109.99, but we spent a lot of time trying to get it returned, so I think you should send me at leat $125.00. Besides, it was for my birthday! The passage above is excerpted from the body of a letter of complaint. Which statement evaluates the effectiveness of this passage best? The letter is well written, using appropriate tone and specific details. The tone of the letter is too informal and lacks details needed for a good resolution. The writer should be given more money because it was a birthday gift. The letter is effective in its tone but lacks specific details.
The tone of the letter is too informal and lacks details needed for a good resolution. "Kool" and "I was SO excited" are informal. And just cause it's "for their birthday" and "they spent a lot of time returning it" doesn't mean they should get 25 dollars more then what they spent. Also they need more information about what game and where they got it from and how they tried to return it :)
