Read the rough draft of a student's conclusion to an
argumentative editorial.
(1) Year-round schooling would help student
achievement. (2) Not so much information would have
to be crammed into nine months. (3) Furthermore, the
elimination of long breaks, particularly summer break,
would significantly reduce "learning loss" and the
additional time wasted at the beginning of each
academic year to reteach previously learned material.
(4) It is clear that year-round schooling helps students
learn and retain more. (5) The United States is not the
only country to experiment with a year-round school
schedule. (6) Although many still claim that evidence
about year-round school and its link to higher
achievement is inconclusive, these people need to
open their eyes and see that students in these
schools consistently score higher on certain
assessments than students who attend schools with
Mark this and return
Why should sentence 4 be removed from this
conclusion?
It criticizes those who disagree with the writer.
OIt strengthens the viewpoint of the opposition.
It states a fact that is unrelated to the topic.
It unnecessarily restates the editorial's claim.
Why should sentence 4 be removed from this conclusion
