your explanation is fluent from the first to the middle ,but start from the middle upto the end your message became redundant (ex. cheap/you just used that word repeatedly , if you can't avoid to use it you can just replace it with other word ,so it won't sounds redundant) .
you've just double the word (their)/Themessageisthattheirtheircompetitor.../
you forgot to put a parenthesis on (dont) it is (don't
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i hope you can consider my observation,btw you've done a nice work
