Question

in a college admissions essay, it is appropriate to

Answer 1

To have all schools you went to listed.
To have all volunteer work listed.
To have your job listed.
To have all your skill's listed.
And of course to drop in what degree you want, as well as listing what you want to do with your degree.
In a admissions essay the school just wants to see what your capable of, and what you have done

Answer 2

First thing, Do not talk about what would you do if you got accepted in the college. Talk about what you want to learn, what did you learn, how can university help everyone learning, how learning is a big responsibility, how learning is the main reason for a successful future, etc...

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