Question

revise the following essay so that it's more appropriate for the task, purpose, and audience described in the prompt.

Prompt.write an argumentative essay aimed at your a state legislator that explains a few problems related to climate change and argues for reasonable change that ordinary people can make to help these problems
ESSAY.one way that we can help keep climate change from getting worse is by using public transportation rather than individual cars whenever possible. These changes in heat affect the entire Globes climate but not always in the same way. One outcome of climate change is extreme weather-not just extreme heat or drought, but also tornadoes, hurricanes, floods and other disasters that used to happen just once in a blue moon. Climate change is the result of carbon emissions in the atmosphere trapping heat that would normally leave through the ozone. Cars are responsible for 28% of carbon emissions in the United States if each person rode the bus just one day a week carbon emissions could be reduced by almost 40% ​

Answer 1

Answer:

Climate change is the result of carbon emissions in the atmosphere trapping heat that would normally leave through the ozone.

One outcome of climate change is extreme weather-not just extreme heat or drought, but also tornadoes, hurricanes, floods and other disasters that used to happen just once in a blue moon. These changes in heat affect the entire Globes climate but not always in the same way.

One way that we can help keep climate change from getting worse is by using public transportation rather than individual cars whenever possible, because cars are responsible for 28% of carbon emissions in the United States if each person rode the bus just one day a week carbon emissions could be reduced by almost 40%

Explanation:

The text has been reorganized, to present a more fluid and coherent structure, showing the information in the order in which they would best achieve the objective of the text and allows a full understanding of the audience.

The word "because" was added in the last paragraph to increase the fluidity of the text. In addition, the reorganization of paragraphs makes the text more coherent and cohesive.