Question

At a local elementary school, parents are lingering in Miss Olivia's kindergarten classroom past the start of the school day, making the emotional transition harder for their children. The parents are also crowding the limited physical space within the classroom and doorway. Miss Olivia, the kindergarten teacher, drafted a notice to be distributed to the kindergartners' parents to rectify this problem. Explain why Miss Olivia's draft is ineffective and how to improve it. Then, create a new notice to replace Miss Olivia's notice.

Answer 1

Incomplete question. The remaining part of the question read;

"September 15, 2019

Attention kindergarten parents: do not remain in your children's classrooms for too long, as this is causing problems.

Miss Olivia"

Explanation:

For example, Miss Olivia's draft could be misunderstood, or even ignored since it does explain the problems arising from their actions.

However, the draft can be made better by clarifying to parents why their actions are a big cause of concern. A new notice to replace Miss Olivia's notice could read;

"September 15, 2019

Attention kindergarten parents: In other to avoid overcrowding and to make the emotional transition of your children for too long.

Offenders would be penalized!!!  Thank you for your cooperation.

Miss Olivia"