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When i said bye i expected to never see you again
but i pass by and you are there again
and i can't say hi or greet you so i just take back my extended hand
and i wish that there was something i could say but dam.n
we were best friends and we told each other everything
we talked everyday and always said good morning
we asked how eachother were and held the other when they were mourning
but did you ever answer honestly to how are you
a three letter word was supposed to suffice
i dare you to try to get me to sum up my life
and then be pleased when i say 'mhm' it was 'gud'
and as if that didn't hurt you well i ask you to chose
chose who, and when you don't do
Well goodbye you. no i get it though
i get it though it must've felt like another cold blow
when you're living in the arctic driving snow
and it must've frostbit
must've dimmed your glow
when i said bye i expected to never see you again
but i pass by and you are there again
and i can't say hi or greet you so i just take back my extended hand
and i wish that there was something i could say but dam.n
now i feel like saying a word would be a curse
you need space it would only make it worse
and i hope you don't read this because i know you don't need this
but it's the only way i get things off my chest
and if it's poison y'know i can't let it rest
so i hope you can just do your best and i'll do mine too
when i said bye i expected to never see you again
but i pass by and you are there again
and i can't say hi or greet you so i just take back my extended hand
and i wish that there was something i could say but dam.n
dam.n what is there to say everything was laid out so clear
And i know it's probably selfish to say all this here
But what am i supposed to do i have nowhere else and you’re not the only one
Whos not moving from the trail because i'm staying here even though
It hurts like a stitch rip everytime i see a text of yours and i can’t click reply
And it may be narcissistic but to be honest
when i said bye i expected to never see you again
but i pass by and you are there again
and i can't say hi or greet you so i just take back my extended hand
and i wish that there was something i could say but dam.n
when i said bye i expected to never see you again
but i pass by and you are there again
and i can't say hi or greet you so i just take back my extended hand
and i wish that there was something i could say but dam.n
