Question

Read the rough draft of a student's conclusion to an
argumentative editorial
Which best revises sentence 6 to create a more
appropriate and respectful tone?
A be
(1) Year-round schooling would help student
achievement. (2) Not so much information would have
to be crammed into nine months. (3) Furthermore, the
elimination of long breaks, particularly summer break,
would significantly reduce "learning loss" and the
additional time wasted at the beginning of each
academic year to reteach previously learned material
(4) It is clear that year-round schooling helps students
learn and retain more. (5) The United States is not the
only country to experiment with a year-round school
schedule. (6) Although many still claim that evidence
about year-round school and its link to higher
achievement is inconclusive, these people need to
open their eyes and see that students in these schools
consistently score higher on certain assessments than
students who attend schools with traditional nine-
Although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, studies consistently reveal that year-
round students score higher on certain
assessments than those students who attend
schools with traditional nine-month calendars.
O Although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, this theory is wrong because students
in year-round schools consistently score higher on
certain assessments than those students who
attend schools with traditional nine-month
calendars
Although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement i

Answer 1

Answer:

Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, studies consistently reveal that year-round students score higher on certain assessments than those students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars.

Explanation:

All options you were given are the following:

• Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, studies consistently reveal that year-round students score higher on certain assessments than those students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars.
• Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, this theory is wrong because students in year-round schools consistently score higher on certain assessments than those students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars.
• Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, they would admit defeat if only they would do their research and find that students in year-round schools consistently score higher on certain assessments than those students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars.
• Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, these people need to study their facts and acknowledge that students in year-round schools consistently score higher on certain assessments than those students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars.

The first option is the best one because it is completely objective. Objective statements are statements that contain only facts, statements uninfluenced by personal beliefs, emotions, and assumptions. The student uses data from some research, which makes the statement objective. The tone is also appropriate - it's neutral. Other statements lack objectiveness and their tone is not as neutral as it should be.  

Answer 2

Answer:

A)Although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, studies consistently reveal that year-round students score higher on certain assessments than those students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars.

Explanation:

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