Directions: Pretend you are tutoring four kids. They each have to answer the prompt below. Read the prompt, then answer the question that follows.
Prompt: You have to nominate someone for an award. Who would you nominate for what award and why?
Sample A:
I would nominate my mother, Louisa Anne Jones, for an award. My mother sacrifices for our family all the time. She works extra hours to make sure we have special birthdays and extra Christmas presents. She works for the local church too. On my last birthday, she had little money so she sold a painting she liked to get money to buy me a gift. I would call the award “The Giving Spirit Award.” My mom sacrifices for our family, our church, and less fortunate people in the city. She visits homeless shelters and reads to the children so their moms and dads can take a break or go to job interviews.
Sample B:
My brother, SPC Arthur Rose, should receive the award for outstanding American. My brother is serving our country in Iraq. He has been there for 9 months now. He has sacrificed time with our family to protect the rights of others. He is really brave. He is really courageous. He is also a good son and a good brother. He sends money home to our mom. He told me that he has saved money so that I can go to college. When he is home, he still acts like a soldier. To me, my brother is everything an American should be.
Sample C:
I think my pastor deserves an award. He is a good man. He does stuff for the community, for children, for the elderly and for the sick. He encourages everyone. I like him because of what he has done.
Sample D:
My grandma deserves an award for outstanding service to the community. She bakes pies for the church. Everyone at church says her apple pie is the best apple pie in the world. She uses lemon juice, cinnamon and nutmeg in it. I don’t know all the ingredients, but those pies are delicious. The smells make your mouth water. She spends lots of time baking.
Which of the paragraphs suffers from incoherence?
sample A
sample B
sample C
sample D
