Question

Read the sentence.

Over a period of four days, while we were on vacation out of town, my dog repeated the same behavior over and over again and refused to eat.

Which revision best reduces the sentence to make it easier to understand?


A) We were out of town on vacation for four days, and my dog repeated the same behavior by refusing.

B) During the four days that we were on vacation, my dog refused to eat.

C) My dog refused to eat every day of the four days that we were out of town on vacation.

D) We were away on a vacation for four days and my dog repeatedly refused to eat each day we were away.

Answer 1

Answer: B is correct, "During the four days that we were on vacation, my dog refused to eat."

Explanation:

The words vacation and out of town are repetitive, and therefore unnecessary. The words repeated and over and over again are the same case. When you remove both of those, sentence B best portrays the most concise sentence.

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Answer 2

Answer:

B. During the four days that we were on vacation, my dog refused to eat.

Explanation:

Generally, when you want something to be easier to understand, avoid repetitive information, and don't use passive voice. A passive voice indirectly refers to something, like "my homework has been completed", rather than "I've done my homework".

In this, there are 2 key pieces of information that should be clear in the answer:

They were on vacation.

The dog refused to eat.

A. is repetitive because it says that they were out of town on vacation- by being on vacation, it's implied that you're out of town (although there are some exceptions).

C. has the same problem as A, but concisely explains that the dog didn't eat.

D. has both of the problems of A, and seems like a word by word paraphrase of the original.

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