Question

Read the following paragraph, and choose the best revision for one of its sentences.
Dr. Blake is retiring at the end of the month. There will be an unoccupied office upon his departure, andit is big in size. Because each and every one of the other offices is fully occupied, it is recommended that we convert Dr. Blake’s office into a lounge. It is absolutely essential that this issue is discussed at the next staff meeting.


a. Because every other office is occupied, it’s recommended that we should convert Dr. Blake’s officeinto a lounge.
b. Because every other office is filled, we should convert Dr. Blake’s office into a lounge.

Answer 1

Answer:

b. Because every other office is filled, we should convert Dr. Blake’s office into a lounge.

Explanation:

Looking at the sentence of the whole passage, the flow of the sentences is smooth until the parallel structuring of the sentences in the end. Instead of mentioning "each and every one of the other offices", the sentence can be made more fluent and easy flowing by just saying "every other office". This will also stop the monotonous flow of words. Also, changing the way of narration in the word "recommend" to a direct form of addressing the idea will make the statement more forward and direct.

Thus, the best revision for the sentence will be-

Because every other office is filled, we should convert Dr. Blake’s office into a lounge.