Answer:
The error in the first sentence is punctuation
"If anyone wants to come to my office to see my new computer let me know".
The second sentence has a style problem called Redundancy
"Please conduct an evaluation of our profits next week"
Explanation:
First sentence:
"If anyone wants to come to my office to see my new computer let me know".
The spellings are correct but there is need for a comma after the first phrase. The correct way to write the same sentence with proper punctuation is
"If anyone wants to come to my office to see my new computer, let me know".
Second sentence:
"Please conduct an evaluation of our profits next week" contain an error of redundancy.
Redundancy means that the same data has been repeated twice, using different words. The sentences with redundant data may be grammatically correct like the one above, but they have unnecessary words.
A concise way of rewriting the same sentence without losing the meaning is
"Please evaluate our profits next week".
