Question

Read the passage, and then answer the question.

[1] This community needs programs assisting those in the reentry process. [2] JUMP High Schools’ efforts to provide better information for newly released juvenile offenders are commendable. [3] Basic fundamental information on reentry services is sorely needed in our community.

3. What types of revisions could be made to the passage to make it more concise? Check all that apply.

1) Purge empty words.
2) Drop unnecessary fillers.
3) Reject redundancies.

Answer 1

Answer:

3) Reject redundancies.

Explanation:

The statement is redundant because 2 of the three sentences essentially convey the same messange:

• [1] This community needs programs assisting those in the reentry process.
• [3] Basic fundamental information on reentry services is sorely needed in our community.

Those two sentences say the same, and one of the two can be dropped to express more clarity, and reject redundancies.