Revising a Passage with Parallel Structu
which revision of the underlined sentences creates a
parallel structure within the paragraph?
Abc
Because the recorder is familiar, children feel
comfortable playing it.
Kelsey is an engineering student at Lafayette College in
Easton, Pennsylvania. For her senior project, she and
her team are designing a robotic device to help children
with disabilities play a musical instrument. They selected
the recorder. The recorder has several advantages over
other instruments. The recorder is plastic, making it low
low
cost and durable. The recorder is small, allowing it to be
held easily. Another advantage is that many people are
familiar with the recorder. So children feel more
comfortable playing it.
The recorder is familiar, helping children feel more
comfortable playing it.
people are familiar with the recorder, which creates
comfort for children.
Musical instruments need to feel comfortable to
children if we expect them to try to play.

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Parallelism occurs when the same grammar pattern is used within a sentence or in a paragraph. In this case, there are three sentences that follow the same sentence pattern in the excerpt:

The recorder is plastic, making it low cost and durable.

The recorder is small, allowing it to be held easily.

The recorder is familiar, helping children feel more comfortable playing it.

The grammar pattern consists of a simple sentence "the recorder is..." following by a gerund phrase (making it, allowing it, helping children).