Question

Would this work as a quality thesis statement? Explain
“The united states should change its approach to the war on terror”

Answer 1

No this is not a quality thesis statement because it is to general and nearly impossible to defend. Here's an example.

Don't write: “Eating fast food is bad and should be avoided.”

It leaves a lot of big questions to answer. Is all fast food bad? Why is it bad? Who should avoid it? Why should anyone care?

Instead write this: “Americans should eliminate the regular consumption of fast food because a fast food diet leads to preventable and expensive health issues, such as diabetes, obesity, and heart disease.”

Answer 2

Would really depend on the information you gave in the introduction paragraph. I suggest to not the use word “it” in your thesis. The point to a thesis is to explain what your essay will be about. So elaborate just a little. I think it’s good but change that word and use a different one. Remember thesis statements are one to two sentences. Maybe three depending on the length of your essay but that is pushing it. Your thesis statement should tell you what your paper is about alongside the rest of your introduction.