Respuesta :
When comparing the GDPs, Instead of saying compared it to, you might want to type, "in comparison." A few transition words also might help the piece become a bit smoother. Other than that, good job on the writing! It seems very well researched!
OK, so personally I don’t see that many mistakes. I spotted two places where I think there should be commas. Towards the end of your first paragraph between lower and especially. Also, between people and but when you were talking about what tourism employs. If this is very important to you and you want to make sure there are no mistakes; I would download the Grammarly app and use their free keyboard! Good job and good luck!