The story is Haley, a soccer player, collected used soccer jerseys and sent them to Guatemalan children. Her efforts helped create a global soccer team. The questions are 1. What details would help clarify the author’s purpose for writing? 2. What details would make the text more engaging? 3. What details would convey the author’s attitude toward Haley? How else can you strengthen the tone? B. Now revise the draft by adding details to strengthen the text’s style and tone
