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The Jumeirah Beachcomber is my favorite restaurant in Dubai, it sits right on the beach, next to the iconic Burj al-Arab-the world's only seven-star hotel-built right out in
the Arabian Gulf. The restaurant catches the breezes off the water, the salt smell mingles with scents of sandalwood and frankincense. When we last stayed, the food-an
expansive buffet of Thai and southern Indian delicacies-stretched out before us. My son got his usual: dragon fruit, chicken tikka masala, and beef with saffron, he
headed to the restaurant's game room. Here, he could play Mario Brothers on the Wil while we talked and laughed with friends: the perfect evening.
You need to work on run-on sentences. The sentence - The Jumeirah Beachcomber is my favorite restaurant in Dubai, it sits right on the beach, next to the iconic
Burj al-Arab-the world's only seven-star hotel-built right out in the Arabian Gulf.-contains a comma splice.
You need to work on dashes. The sentence - When we last stayed, the food-an expansive buffet of Thai and southern Indian delicacies-stretched out before us.
- uses dashes incorrectly. The dashes should be replaced with commas.
You don't need to work on anything. Well done!
You need to work on fragments. The sentence-Here, he could play Mario Brothers on the Wil while we talked and laughed with friends: the perfect evening. -
contains an incorrect sentence fragment.
