A recent study said that 59 percent of the cars on
the road could have better fuel efficiency. This
means that less than half of the cars being driven
could get more miles to the gallon. In addition, the
study shows how much everyone could save if their
cars used less gas. This might be the deciding factor
in whether drivers support fuel-efficient technology.
Because no matter how people feel about other car-
related issues, everyone loves cold, hard cash.
How can this writing be revised to be more accurate?
O In the first sentence, change "study" to "report."
In the second sentence, change "less than half to
"more than half."
O In the third sentence, change "In addition" to
"Furthermore."
In the last sentence, change "everyone" to "anyone."
